Post-12: Thesis statement writing practice
- Dear All,
- Today we'll first revise the structure of a 5-paragraph essay by reading and discussing an essay about Market Forces in Business and then we'll complete set of exercises to help you improve your skills in writing thesis statements. Hope you will find these activities useful.
Can you comment on the content & structure of this essay: Interesting? (Why or Why not?) Logical? Well-supported? Your comment - Add your versions of the thesis statements in the thread below.
This is an example from the textbook:
It's focuses on smth the audience can relate to
1.China is a wonderful tourist destination because of its interesting historical monuments, beautiful tourist resorts and outstanding natural beauty.- 2. Think about why so many people want to go there.
- 3. Do not ask the question; answer it. If you do not know about Thailand, use another destination you are familiar with.
- 4. Eliminate the announcement and say what the effects are. Will you discuss positive effects, negative effects or both?
- 5. Say what the disadvantages are. 6. PAY ATTENTION TO PARALLEL STRUCTURE.
- 7. ADD TWO MORE MAIN POINTS.
- 8. Pay attention to the number of sentences.
- As a part of your home task, think of a topic that interests you and write 3 thesis statements related to it. Read the thesis statements written by 2 of your peers and comment on how well they are written. Use the criteria we've discussed.
You can use advice on writing thesis statements available at - thesis/
NB!!! Be clear where to publish your work: either the thread in the T's blog or in your own blog
Those places on the photos are attractive for tourists basically because they differ from places they actually live in. Nevertheless, people tend to make them quite alike by littering, destroying in some way or just spoiling because its-just-a-little-piece-of-trash-it-will-not-do-any-harm (wrong). I believe there is a quite effective solution for this problem: fees of substantial amount of money and actual surveillance.
ReplyDeleteWe've discussed some issues about popular destinations for tourism and here some thoughts about this topic: people travel to such places as temples and mountains to find some kind of inner peace; however, these destinations are so popular, that by being filled with crowds daily are damaged by littering. I suggest bringing in some sort of punishment for littering, e.g. big fines and supervision. People have to take care of the heritage of the humankind to prevent its exstinction.
ReplyDeleteThanks for your comment. I quite agree that smth should be done to preserve the nature and its beauty as well as the objects that together make up our heritage.
DeleteDear All,
ReplyDeleteI want to tell you about "Market forces in tourism".
First of all, there are a lot of places which attracts tourists due to their nature and incredible atmospere. Unfortunately, these destinations are caused by their populatity. Many people destroy them every day: trash and rob.These problems can be resolved only by people. If we take care of nature, it will be grateful to us and everything in the world will be good and people will be kinder.
ReplyDeleteIt's not a secret that all attractions are always full of tourist crowds. Why is it so? It depends on different things. First of all, some attractions such as Machu Picchu or ancient temple of one chinese village are the only beautiful place in that area. So, this is why these places are attractive to tourists. Because of this it also has some negative effects on these destanations. For istance, there are a lot of rubbish there. People don't think about nature when throw leftovers. These problems can be resolved by using cameras and big fines.
Here is a useful resource for you to revise the grammar of Parallel structures in English: https://www.thoughtco.com/parallel-structure-1211264
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ReplyDelete2. France is one of the most visited countries in the world due to its enormous historical heritage, culture impact and even its representation in media.
Hello Lena, your points are good enough, only it'd be better to change 'culture' into "cultural" to make it parallel to the other parts
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ReplyDelete2. There are several reasons why France is in the list of the most visited countries in the world: people want to dive into its culture, language and cousine
1. If you really interested in East culture and always wanted to visit Asia, you'd better start with China because of it's unique architecture and the atmosphere of modern cities.
ReplyDelete2. France is the most visited country due to it's fomoust history and culture which influence on the whole world.
3. Thailand is such a popular tourist destination for twenty-one-something thro availability of resorts, popular pubs and clubs.
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5. Increased tourism has disadvantages of enviromental pollution, of increasing cost and of inability to find quite resort.
6. Thailand is such a popular tourist destination because of its clear beaches, attractive resorts and friendly people.
7. With traveling you can quickly and with ease learn country's history, it's culture and people's mentality.
8. Canada is a popular tourist destination because it has interesting cities, fabulous resorts and spectacular scenery.
2. France is one of the most visited countries in the world due to its enormous historical heritage, culture impact, and representation in media.
ReplyDelete3. Thailand is such a popular tourist destination due to its diversity of nature, cultural and historical sites, and cheap accomodation.
4, 5. Increased demand in tourist industry leads to certain unpleasant consequences: raising prices, lacking accomodation, and decreasing quality of service.
6. Thailand is such a popular tourist destination because of its beautiful beaches, attractive resorts, and friendly people.
7. Travelling is the best way to learn about a country`s history as you can observe its important historical places, speak with its habitants, and visit its essential historial museums.
8. Canada is a popular tourist destination because it has interesting cities, fabulous resorts, and spectacular scenery.
Natalia Yurievna, could you tell us about British literature next time, please? (just remind you because you've asked).
ReplyDeleteHello Natasha, sure! I'll do it with pleasure.
Delete4th topic
ReplyDeleteFOR:
- God created us speaking the same language but people are fools
- NO SCHOOL!
AGAINST:
- people will think of new kinds of differences cuz they`re fools
- kill dat kulture
- kill dat esperanto
- we want work
Lena, I'm sorry I don't quite understand your points: what is "kill dat kulture", "date esperanto"?
DeleteJulia, Arina and I have chosen the topic #3
ReplyDeleteFor:
1) Celebrities are also people who deserve their private life which is kept in a secret;
2) Sometimes, persecution by paparazzi could be even dangerous for people (Just remember the story of Princess Diana);
Against:
1) They have chosen that very way of work, therefore they should accept it;
2) Celebrities have so many benefits, they should just to relax.
2. France is one of the most visited countries of the world because of its internationally known points of the interest and largely hyped special atmosphere..
ReplyDelete3. The reasons of the popularity of Thailand among the tourists seem to be quite evident - good climate, marvelous beaches, some exotic and low prices.
4. Increased demand in the tourist industry notably effects on the economy of the new destinations as well as on the people’s vision of the world.
5. Increased tourism has some disadvantages for the host country, such as pollution of the nature and deterioration of the sights.
6. Thailand is such a popular tourist destination because of its beautiful beaches, attractive resorts and friendliness of the local people.
7. Travel is the best way to learn about the country’ history, its language and mentality.
8. Canada is a popular tourist destination because of its interesting cities, fabulous resorts and spectacular scenery.